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It's a fried egg morning
and the rain bleeds like yolk
past this windowscape of pedestrian indifference.
It's ten past eight
and I'm smoking myself sober,
watching the steam condense.

It's a fried egg morning
across from the Laundromat,
where the spin cycles hypnotise
recovering drunks.
Fat sizzles behind the counter
as the waitress serves up
greasy sausages to some washed-out old punk.

It was a hard night, that's for sure,
catching my kip on the train,
with a newspaper blanket and the stale smell of beer.
stumbling half-blind through the grey dawn
to linoleum and formica
and that slow 'good-morning sugar' atmosphere.

Sunk lower'n the spoon in my coffee cup,
folks say I'm on the out,
but the rumours are grossly exaggerated.
Today's specials?  Waffles and beans,
Spanish omelette topped with grated
mozzarella.
©2008-2010 ~fm-vorassi
:iconfm-vorassi:

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Given 2008-05-27

Of Fried Egg Morning by ~fm-vorassi, the suggestor says, "The poem is grammatically unproblematic, and contains wonderful imagery. It takes the reader to a real-life urban 1950's state of mind; a little Kerouac, a little Tom Waits. You can almost hear Thelonius in the background." A neat poem; definitely worth a read or two. (Suggested by ~Amy--Louise and Featured by `lovetodeviate)

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:iconryu-son:
GRAND imagery. Especially in the first two stanzas. :)

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And in the daylight we can hitchhike to Maine
I hope that someday I'll see without these frames
And in the daylight I don't pick up my phone
'Cause in the daylight anywhere feels like home
-Matt and Kim
:iconfm-vorassi:
Thank you very much, and thanks for the fave!

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Moved to ~ARIrish.
:iconamy--louise:
Rather Tom Waitsian if you ask me. :+fav:

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"To avoid criticism: do nothing, say nothing, be nothing.":frail:
:iconfm-vorassi:
I believe I wrote this on the cusp of my introduction to Waits. Some of my other poems around this time were definitely, shamefully, Waits-inspired, though I think this one was just coincidence.

Thank you for the fave!

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Moved to ~ARIrish.
:iconamy--louise:
yer welcome!!

- it's magically delicious! :shamrock:

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"To avoid criticism: do nothing, say nothing, be nothing.":frail:
:iconjou-voy:
It feels one of a kind. +Fav
:iconihaveacrushonmadd:
I have to say, the first two stanzas are better than the second two. Love the personification of the rain.

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"to die would be an awfully big adventure"
:iconfemketje:
amazing work!

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-strangle me up inside of you-
:iconfm-vorassi:
Thank you! And thanks for the fave!

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Moved to ~ARIrish.
:iconfm-vorassi:
I have to say, I probably agree with you, though I'm quite pleased with the last one.

Thanks for the comment, and the fave!

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Moved to ~ARIrish.

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